Well, I'm no expert on what editors will like (and I've got the stack of rejections to prove it
), but I personally liked it. Maybe because, knowing the quote, I was able to solve this with an average amount of difficulty.
As a constructor, I'd personally try to find a quote from that author that includes one of his made up words (e.g. You can have my jellyfish / I'm not sellyfish
). But then, see comment above.